First Story – Business Insider/War Report

May 8th, 2012

“The General and Winning the War in Helmand” is the first story I’ve written since being here. It took me about two weeks to write, due to exhaustive research into the private side of the conflict, but I think in the end it came out pretty good.

Once I’ve exhausted any venue willing to publish, I’ll post the unedited version. The story came in at about 5,700 words, so I expected heavy editing, depending on the venue.

Business Insider – The General – Teaser

Business Insider – The General – Part 1 of 4

War Report Story

I expected heavy editing because the story wasn’t just about the General, once I got into some research, but also about the failed attempts to build an economy here; a transition which I considered as important as the military transition.

It got kind of technical here and there, but I tried to keep it light. My editor for The War Report decided to keep it with just the General, despite the (albeit brief, in my opinion) lambasting of USAID. Her idea was to write a story just about USAID, and I have to say, in the end, I agree – I’ll probably do it when I get back, because, man, USAID is a giant suck.

If you’re too interested to wait for me to post the unabridged version, send me an email and I’ll respond with an attachment of the original, but again, they deserve their own 5K-word diatribe (if not congressional investigation).

I plan to finish my journal postings once I get home, but in a somewhat unorthodox format – kind of like chapters in a short book.

Finally, thank you for all your support.

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